Pack the Bowls (deck the halls parody)

(please comment on this and tell me if you like it)
a while back i made up this song man
and it was cool but before i make it into a actual song
i decided to make you all a little christmas song
yes my vocals suck but it adds to the funny factor of the song
just listen to it and i hope youll like it

tell me what you all think i need your support
its a youtube vid
sorry the sound quality isnt so awesome
(lyrics are in the description)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DyAN_C3eF5M"]pack the bowls -- stoner stan - YouTube

(( Pack the bowls with loads of weed
fala lala laa puff puff lala

tis the season to be stony
fala lala laa puff puff lala

toke we now our loaded blunt
fala lala lala puff puff lala

roll the ancient yule tide joint
falala lala puff puff lala

see the blazing weed before us
fala lala puff puff lala

strike a match and get baked with us
fala lala la puff puff lala

follow me in marijuana pleasures
fala lala la puff puff lala

while i pack in some more reefer
fala lala la puff puff lala

fast away the loaded joint passes
fala lala la puff puff lala

roll a new one full of the best grasses
fala lala la puff puff lala

toke we joyus all together
fala lala la puff puff lala

heedless of time and whatever
fala laalaa laa puff puff lalaaaa))

 

oh yeah and please if you listen to it please tell me what you think of it..
please dont just listen and leave i need all the criticism i can get man..

thanks and remember have a stony little christmas

 

an exceptional work of art

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=12qBoy2rhVw"]Tom Waits - Christmas Card From a Hooker in Minneapolis - YouTube

 

You wanted a critique.

It sounds like your voice is being processed. 'Way too much.

You might try changing the timbre your voice during the song.
After about 3 lines, the audience gets the joke, so the performer has to give them something to keep them interested.
Like Sing a descant for a couple of verses.
Or Sing some verses in your "holding a toke while talking" voice.
Or vary volume
etc.

Cool video. Keep it up. (Did Weird Al start this way? )

I hope you don't think this was harsh. It isn't meant that way.

 

Cool

 

stuff your face with hits of molly
la la ala blah blah
tis the season of the junky
blah la da da la la blah
wait we shall for the slow ass dealer
blah dee la dee blah blah blah
when he gets here ill be noddy
blah da blah blah da da blah

 

i was joking, you suck

 

i watched. it was pretty lame but i laughed.

and that's not real weed in the picture, is it??

 

i dunno whats in that picture man
someone sent it to me so i used it lol

But hey man i know it was lame but thats the whole point of it
lmao its the funny kinda lame man. thanks for watching it though glad it made ya laugh
and thanks to every one else who watched it too

 

the voice was weird. how close is that to your normal voice? if you were looking for improvements i'd say don't make your voice so deep

 

well my voice is kinda like that already but i put on some of it for a comedy like effect man

 

yea it did make your voice sound wierd and it was kinda lame but it made me laugh too.
Just work on it some.