Cheers, Love

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ci0616, Feb 12, 2012.

  1. ci0616

    ci0616 Banned

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    Cheers Love

    You left me last Saturday
    Left me in cigarette cloud
    Thick as the hole in me
    Left me in a heap of green misery
    And ashen tears that fell
    In the bitter traces of sweet footsteps
    Yours

    Hazy solitude and deep remorse
    This feeling of limbo
    Of in and out and in again
    And then out once more
    Of can’t and won’t and shouldn’t and finally
    Will

    The blues and the whites and the purples
    Fuel the melody of the madness
    It’s sickening pace
    And you left me with the feeling of
    Where am I
    Am?

    Am I at all?
     
  2. HayzleBell

    HayzleBell Member

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    reminds me of my last saturday.
    i read this several times to myself. and then again out loud. and that really did it for me. i really like it, especially spoken. thanks for sharing your words.
     
  3. ci0616

    ci0616 Banned

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    Thanks Hayzle! Glad you liked it!
     
  4. WolfLarsen

    WolfLarsen Member

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    I liked it too!
     
  5. ci0616

    ci0616 Banned

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    Glad you enjoyed it Wolf!
     
  6. TheGhost

    TheGhost Auuhhhhmm ...

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    God job there. :2thumbsup:

    And I don't usually like poetry ....
     
  7. ci0616

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    Wow, thanks Ghost. Really glad you liked it!
     

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