I can't thrive off spirit and scripture, the picture became clearer if the meek claim the earth why must we bend before richer found no mana, in this land where morality is banned Now disillusioned, I unclasped my hands. Your edicts, commands, all you've foretold, have let blind lead the blind, caused pure havoc and woe. Hearing crooked ones babble. Berated with lies, we gave them our ears, gave them our fears, our tongues our wallets and both eyes. Futile demands, fatal reprimands, despise evil and sin, yet put both in man. Search for infinite blessings, has made our lives worse, if were all born from god then whats preachers word worth? If we're made in your image, then it follows to me that my own reflection should be all around me. or wait, maybes thats blasphemy but its logical, it has to be if none look like our patriarch we're all just living bastardly. It seems further absurdity, we can't find some fraternity, lives devoid of worth, substance and yet we seek eternity. I've studied scriptures and verses researched your churches dealt with base self grappled with urges. and based off these trials I've found this to be true heavens earth potential hells what its going to. Through the sermons and meetings, monotonous ritual at least I've learned difference between religious and spiritual. Cuz religion, made the vision where the muslim hates the christian made the christian hate the jew faith is sickness like flu. Contracted like a virus kills a lot more people too causing plight violent fights and yet you sit there, stay aloof. So with this letter, I've made up my mind to withdraw myself from your final design. So take care of yourself and those many deceivers Respectfully yours, a former believer.
wow. I'm surprised no one has commented on this! I thought it was very well thought out. do you ever read at open mic's? this is a great out loud piece
I really, really loved this. There were a couple of lines that especially spoke to me. My only issue with this is that it seems like you can't decide if you want to use capital letters or not. Personally when I write I don't use any capital letters when starting a sentence, using a proper noun, etc. In your poem you capitalized the beginning of your sentences, but didn't capitalize proper nouns (i.e. "Jew", "Muslims", etc.). Choose to capitalize or choose to not, but don't float in the middle! I can't wait to read more from you!
