suicide note

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by romaniack, Dec 26, 2004.

  1. romaniack

    romaniack Member

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    do you like my poems-
    they turn me on-
    my rite hand holds the pen-
    in the other is my gun-
    im starting to write much faster,
    for my life is ticking away-
    im still bleeding from when I tried to kill myself the other day-
    no success, but pleasure from the pain-
    and ive descided that this second is when I deficate my brain-
     
  2. Internity

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    wow, thats awesome, well, not awesome but really an kool poem, (im in to crazy stuff like that) hopefully its not real, it reminds me of what i'd write. so are you a suicided nut like me 2>? i would say thats kool but accually its stupid....no offence,,,i like your poem,,.keep em up....im sure others want to read them 2..
     
  3. romaniack

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    Im not suicidal at all... I find it really selfish... in my situation at least. to many people love me and I love to many people... I write passionate poems about things that inspire me... being depressed sometimes is great inspiration and assistance in taking out agression and depression is writing. I feel much better after writing that... its like I read what someone else wrote as a suicide note or something and I was like ohh man I know exactly where that guy is coming from... and then felt better... Ok so Im at work and really high... If this little rant here didnt make sence to anyone... im sorry

    p.s. possitive feedback nice Thanks you guys who read my poems... (( insecure writer))
     
  4. fukitall

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    gOOD FOR FUKING YOU,.,,,,,,,,,I AM SUICIDAL,..I DONT SEE IT AS SELFISH..WHY DO YOU SEE IT THAT WAY? nOT MANY PEOPLE LOVE ME AND THE ONES WHO DO DONT COUNT IN THE SCHEME OF THINGS. IM SUICIDAL...HOPEFULLY I WONT WAKE UP TOMORROW
    BYE FOREVER I HOPE
     
  5. fukitall

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    iT IS THOSE LEFT BEHIND WHO FEEL THE PAIN AFTER A SUICIDE....SORRY MOM, DAD, GRANDMA, GRANDPA, AND DANNY



     
  6. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    thats why romaniak said its selfish..duh! because of the people that you hurt by it.
     
  7. BraveSirRubin

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    That poem sucks.
     
  8. browneydgrl

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    that poem was beautiful. i understand and appreciate someone that can write about something without the intent of actually doing it. you're a very creative writer...painted a real picture
     
  9. romaniack

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    well thanks for your feedback... um I feel its selfish in my situation. I kinda in a comfort zone, just a little in debt and a little lonely but my oppinion is that this to shall pass rite... well whatever and um fuck you bravesirRubin I like my poem. you know what your photography sucks... actually its pretty good... but fuck you just the same
     
  10. BraveSirRubin

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    I was only joking, I tend to do that with suicidal thoughts... in which "everything sucks" :) The poem could use some work, but is rather good.
     
  11. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    enjoyed the flow you have in this one... but the word "deficate" takes away from the ending, imo. good job overall, though! :)
     
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