Moonlight Ride

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by KarmaComa, Feb 17, 2005.

  1. KarmaComa

    KarmaComa Member

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    I found this poem that I wrote a long time ago for some assignment in school and thought I would share it.


    Jenny was so happy about the house
    they had found
    For once in her life it was on the
    right side of town
    She unpacked her stuff with such
    great ease
    As she watched her new curtains
    blow in the breeze
    How wonderful it was to have
    her own room
    School would be starting, she'd have
    friends over soon
    There would be sleep overs and parties
    she was so happy
    It's just the way she wanted her
    life to be

    On the first day of school everything
    went great
    She made new friends and even
    got a date
    She thought I want to be popular and
    I'm going to be
    Cause I just got a date with the
    star of the team
    To be known in this school you
    had to have clout
    And dating this guy would sure
    help her out
    There was one thing stopping
    her fate
    Her parents had said she was
    too young to date
    "Well I just won't tell them the
    entire truth
    They won't know the difference
    whats there to lose?"
    She asked to stay with her
    friends that night
    Her parents frowned but said
    "Alright"
    As she rushed around like
    she had no sense
    She bag to feel guilty
    about all the lies
    But what's a pizza, a party,
    a moonlight ride?


    Well the pizza was good and the
    party was great
    But the moonlight ride would
    have to wait
    For Jeff was half drunk by
    this time
    But he kissed her and said
    he was just fine
    The the room filled with smoke
    and Jeff took a puff
    Jenny couldn't believe he was
    smoking that stuff
    Now Jeff was ready to ride to
    The Point
    But only after he had smoked
    another joint

    They jumped in the car for the
    moonlight ride
    Noth thinking that he was too drunk
    to drive
    They made it to The Point
    at last
    And Jeff started trying to make
    a pass
    "Perhaps my parents were right...
    maybe I am too young
    Boy how could I ever be
    so dumb?"
    With all of her might she pushed
    Jeff away
    "Please take me home
    I don't want to stay"
    Jeff cranked up the engine and
    floored the gas
    In a matter of seconds they were
    going to fast
    As Jeff drove faster in a
    fit of anger
    She knew her life was in
    grave danger
    She begged and pleaded for
    him to slow down
    But he just went faster as
    they neared town
    "Just let me get home; I'll confess
    that I lied
    I really went out for
    a moonlight ride"
    The all of a sudden she saw
    a bright flash
    "Oh God please help up
    we're going to crash"

    She doesnt remember the
    force of impact
    Just that suddenly the world
    went black
    She felt someone remove her
    from the twisted rubble
    And heard "Call an ambulance;
    these kids are in trouble!"
    She awoke in the hospital to faces
    so sad
    "You've been in an accident and
    it looks pretty bad"
    These voices echoed inside
    her head
    As they gently told her
    that Jeff was dead
    They said "Jenny, we've done all
    we can do,
    But it looks like we may
    lose you too"
    "But the people in the other
    car??" Jenny cried
    "We're sorry Jenny but they
    also died"

    Jenny prayed, "God forgive me for
    what I've done
    I only wanted one night of
    fun
    Tell all those peoples families
    I've made there lives dim
    And I wish I could return
    their loved ones to them
    Tell Mom and Dad I'm sorry
    I lied
    And its my fault so many
    people died
    Oh nurse wont you please tell
    them that for me?"
    the nurse just stood there
    she never agreed
    But she took Jenny's hand with
    tears in her eyes
    A few seconds later, Jenny had
    died
    A man asked the nurse "Why
    didn't you tell her you'd
    grant her last request??"
    The nurse looked at the man
    with eyes so sad
    "Because the people in the other car were her mom and dad"



    Damn its long.. and a lil morbid. My teachers loved it though. :eek:
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    crumbs i...that was painful to read. :( really sad. very well written um. totally moving man. ow.
     
  3. co-pilot

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    I think it's beautiful... but sad:(
     
  4. Smiling_Rose

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    brilliant, loved it
     
  5. KarmaComa

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    Thank you very much. It's been a while since I wrote it and thats not really my style anymore, but I thought it was pretty good my self. :)
     
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