wednesday or thursday

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Got_Culture?, Feb 24, 2005.

  1. Got_Culture?

    Got_Culture? Member

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    Today i am feeling how i mainly feel everyday.
    I cant explain the feeling. Is it me or is it all in my head... Why did I come back here, it just makes me more miserable!
    Just a tear drop away, where is my fairy godmother!!!
    I was fooling myself that it would be over yet, it has gotten worse, much worse.
    I feel like a zombie
    I feel like a peasant
    feeling like someone i havent met yet
    Happy/sad Happy/sad I wonder what tomorrow brings
     
  2. moe-ron10091

    moe-ron10091 Member

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    it's good til the last two lines. a revamp or cut would be nice, but i really dig the first seven :)
     
  3. Major Peacenik

    Major Peacenik Member

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    some more line breaks might do this poem good. I love "feeling like someone I haven't met yet," though.
     
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