look, see Buddha cries dawn see the birds flying heaven is red and life just can't get more beautiful.
Now that's spacing! And who ever said we shouldn't hold our breath to be more alive? I really like the last four lines and the mode of delivery gives them their due. Write on!
Couldn't have said it better myself. This is a poem, that on reading, makes me wish I'd written it. Great work.
that is a stunning delivery, truely! and kidder,...if i ever write my first poem you better give me high marks like that, hahaha
thank you soo much everybody..this was really nice.. writing poetry is an ache at times..right now i got no ideas..i need inspiration..can anyone help me??..lol.. i'm not sure of the last line...it's quite different from the rest..any ideas? kidder..lol..come on you always got your head full of ideas..give me a little advice.. bobby..if kidder doesn't give you a high mark on your poem..i'm going to try.. ramlin' man..wish you wrote it?..isn't that to go pretty far? i actually got a version in norwegain to..but there's no reason to post here because there's hardly anyone who will understand it.. Have a nice day all of you...
adoration from the public is the highest form of flattery,.... dont.t change a thing,... in my opinion kidder gave you the highest compliment that was deserved. and you wrote the best quote i have ever read, 'writing poetry is an ache',....that, i consider to be a classic line. a true artist feels the pain before the elation! keep writing Cass, you have a beautiful heart! haha, yeah cassiopeia, don't worry,...kidder is fair and won't fail me in class!!!!??? keep writing!! hey rafaela?,...is that a martin behind you?
