love broken bones sore speaking to myself wondering but coming to no conclusions. ......i dont know. colors red, coral. sensitive this fabric of love. the heart is woven with pain and the flutter of laughter. light and dense i cry i imagine hands you have such beautiful hands. i dont know what happens next and it frightens me. alone, purify undone at the seams. love has no under tones i dont know.
oh shit, lol, I thought I had...meant to! Glad you bumped it. speaking to myself wondering but coming to no conclusions. ......i dont know. ain't that the truth. Liked it all except the last line. I think it has too many under tones at times. Thanks sweety~*
Intriguing. There is an obvious desperation here but what are its roots? I see the hands as symbolizing spiritual intervention, something you're aching for as your life threatens to run out of control. And yet you're not ready.... for that. 'and the flutter of laughter. light and dense' Lines like the above don't work as flutter won't carry 'dense.' It's a work in progress like most of what is posted here. Write on!
how the longing can drive a world of poetry to life.... i love the way you need to ask just ask ..... love has no undertones i dont know....... only if you allow then i believe love can do many things........ love n peace from saff lovely poem....
A simple pile of truthful gems. You handle matters of the heart with such delicacy and taste Helen. This one packs a real punch. I loved it.
I had this great reply all typed out, hit a wrong button and it was gone. Almost seems like an analogy to your poem… anyways yeah; I loved this, and agree with skinny on the powerful punch. This has so much desperate confusion and is tackled so elegantly. The first and third stanzas were my favorites, although all were beautiful. Nothing here seemed unnecessary; and I think the last line fits perfectly. From my perspective, sometimes love is nothing more than all encompassing pain… a consuming thing threatening to burn you to a crisp. It’s everything that it shouldn’t be. At least that’s what I took away from this. Awesome piece here, thanks for sharing it!
