i used to be there but now im gone gone like the wind,summers cool breeze, gone like the smell of roses sucked by bee's, gone like days you wish would never end you took advantage of my love you thought i would be with you through lifes every bend. let me go my wounds must mend leave me alone, you're not my friend you lied to me every day especially when you'd say 'i love you' now and forever i will pray 'God, come and take me away, i dont want to see another day!' i find the knife so fine and thin should i let the blade enter in? should i toss the knife even through strife? should i show courage and might , over come my fright? why did you do this to me? will you save me, or let me bleed? Hey, is this good? i have no clue, i just started to write poems & songs.
I like the opening lines. The sentiment, the vulnerability. Just tighten up your ideas a bit. Don't be afraid not to rhyme.
