muy bien

Discussion in 'Writers Forum' started by snelio37, Mar 9, 2005.

  1. snelio37

    snelio37 Member

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    this is an extremely rough draft. it needs much improvement and a name. can anyone offer some suggestions?

    gracias.

    "Can any one tell me why i bother to get up in the morning? is it for the sexism? is it for the stolen stuff? is it for the bad grades? is it for the failed tests? is it for the missing friends? is it for the unavailable hug? is it for the name-calling? is it for the abuse? is it for the cold? is it for the boring lectures? someone tell me why. tell me why i leave my warm safe bed, where the terrible nightmares of the outside world cease to exist, and gentle dreams vibrate in their stead. tell me why i leave that paradise for the lamentable existence provided by the world i'm thrown into upon stepping out.Now i remember- it's because of you. your warm embrace, taking me so high, your beautiful countenance making me realize that while my bed is safe from those other things, those other hideous, awful things, it is also safe from you, the most beautiful thing of all."
     
  2. Keramptha

    Keramptha Senior Member

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    wowo.. i wish i had that vibe
     
  3. Dilapidated

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    I really really like that. Um... no suggestions for a title or anything really, I'm just in awe because you captured that feeling so well.
     
  4. snelio37

    snelio37 Member

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    oh wow thanks. that totally made my night even a little brighter.

    where are ya in IL? always looking for new illinoisians to pal around with.
     
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