A little something I wrote the other night...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Wormed, Jul 31, 2007.

  1. Wormed

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    His house built ego-wide
    Statues abound
    Feeling cold stares on the back of your neck
    As these walls come alive

    These portraits...
    Quivering shivers sent down your spine
    Hung long before their time


    What a beautiful array
    Ecclectic facade
    As your hands feel as cold as ice
    Dormant eyes staring alone


    As this sky diminishes to dusk
    Rain pours from mouths that once felt so dry
    Seemingly unendless droughts
    Brought forth storms in his echoing reply

    As this embrace echoes through your walls
    So Hollow these portraits cry out
    An emptyness so fullfilling...

    So fullfilling to the dead


    What a beautiful array
    an ecclectic facade
    [what beautiful decay
    through this house it resides]
    As your breath echoes forth into the night
    Still dormant these eyes, staring alone

    Butcher's Broom
     
  2. Wormed

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    since i have such a weird poetry style, here's the breakdown:

    this one was written about people who have no dignity or self respect for themselves, so they go out and buy into the material hype to seek that extra 'something', when really it brings them back to where they began - to self doubt, and unhappiness. basically, it's a reminder of staying true to yourself, and not getting lost in the darker aspects of a world that can potentially be so bright for each and every one of us.

    anyways, yeah. probably makes a little more sense now ;)

    your thoughts on it?
     
  3. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    It's good, actually, just kind of confused me at first. :)
     
  4. Chess Hotel

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    Wow, that's pretty deep. I actually liked it a lot. keep up the good work :)
     
  5. children of korn

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  6. blackheartbitch

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    i liked it. ur writing styles deep not wierd
     
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