This is about a boy I know. I loved him, but he's completely faithful to his wonderful, sweet girlfriend of four years. Who can blame him, mm? Outlawed relations are bathed in muddy sunlight Happiness; he is entombed across the hallway. Once hope sparked quietly in our eyes Reality has dimmed that life.
there is good potential there but i think each sentence is a bit scattered , I would try to relate or flow each of them bit better. but other then that small bit good job
