Brighton

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by millieha49, Mar 2, 2008.

  1. millieha49

    millieha49 Member

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    Empty vase at the back of the cupboard
    We have a lot in common
    You and me.
    Blind people feed us, but there is nothing left to feed.
    Just a few petals
    Oozing juice like a stinking peach
    Abandoned on the autumn carpet.
    A thorn or two, fallen to the floor,
    Biding its time, waiting patiently for the opportunity to strike.
    And where has the stem gone?
    The backbone of the whole affair?
    Crumpled like powdered bone and blowin' in the wind.

    Go down to the modest hemline of the beach, you can call for it.
    Your voice will scatter like a million grains of sand
    and you will return
    Laying like dead in the dark floral cave you paid £40 for
    All the way down at Brighton seaside.

    Get back on the bus
    You can search some more
    But your soul has been sold back to the soil for a fair price
    You will never find it.
     
  2. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    i really liked this...i felt there were a few images/lines out of place, like "blind people feed us, but there is nothing left to feed," i didnt really know what was going on there, but for the most part i enjoyed the dark tone of this
     

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