They cheer when many an innocent is killed in vengeful murder Are you still sure you want to be apart of this new world order? Where the bombs are what illuminate the night Second only to the hatred which is encouraged to burn so bright Do they feel the anger inside of them bruin'? Just before they take the life of another human You close your eyes when it stares you in the face Thinking it irrelevant because the violence occours in a foreign place With a proud solute they return from the sea of sand Maybe I would be proud of them to, If I could divert my eyes from that blood soaked hand Home of the brave and land of the free Then why are brainwashed cowards all I see? 2 be honost I didnt put much time into this, but please let me know what you think.
It's controversial. It's clever. It's good. Could probably use a little more structure (just my opinion).
Good question... i like it as well, i'm not usually a fan of rhyming poetry (just cuz i'm not very good at it!) but you pulled it off nicely, nothing awkward at all
