cry, little one, cry.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by lucyinthesky, Aug 6, 2004.

  1. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    im your sister
    im your friend
    im your daughter
    im your son.
    i was attached in the womb
    almost as one
    into the world
    what gift given to me.
    i am your lover
    i am your neighbour
    i am beside you on this bus.
    inside my head,
    you are a disease.
    let maggots drip
    from my ears
    and fill my head
    with vacant smoke.
    im your dolly
    im your peanut
    im your sweetheart
    you're my love-
    you-know-nothing.
    im alive
    im a giver
    im a selfish hurting bastard
    Take me back to 84
    September, on a Wednesday
    12 days from the first.
    Stay out of the shower...
    Cross your legs.
    You should have slept
    instead.
     
  2. TheLittleOne

    TheLittleOne Senior Member

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    oh, i thought this post was directed to me....it does say 'little one'....
     
  3. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    hehe no not at all.
     
  4. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    The last 6 lines managed to really pique my interest. I'm not real sure how the reference to maggots and disease furthers your message or even relates to the overall poem. I think of maggots and disease as something to do with decay...and yet again I don't quite see how that would come into play in the poem.
     
  5. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    as always, i love it hun. i can't even begin to describe how amazingly talented you are.

    and in regards to the last few lines. if they mean what i think they mean, then i'm glad she didn't!!!! :eek:
     
  6. Orsino2

    Orsino2 Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    CRY LITTLE ONE!!! CRY!!! MUAHAHAHA!!!! :X
     
  7. ~piscean]-[delusions

    ~piscean]-[delusions Member

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    Nice work! I especially enjoyed the way you ended it with the last few lines.
     
  8. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    Well, this is about people calling someone their daughter, their neighbour, their sister..whatever....but all being ignorant to what you're really about...to me, these people are diseases, they go around thinking they're doing so good.... "ooh i loooove my sister"...but really, she knows nothing about what her sister's really about. the maggots drippin outta my ears is just a metaphore for forgetting the ignorance, and leaving it vacant for new thoughts.

    inside my head,
    you are a disease.
    let maggots drip
    from my ears
    and fill my head
    with vacant smoke.
     
  9. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Wow all of a sudden this takes a self righteous turn of events. Don't you think some people don't let others know what they really are all about? Then you can't really blame the so called "ignorant" people you can only blame yourself.
    I can relate to this poem on the level that I too have people who know little about myself yet they act like they know me. It pisses me off but I also realize it's my fault.
    I think most our problems tend to come from the within but whatever I'm getting philosophical here
     
  10. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    hehe i know what you mean.....and i mean hey, it's something we all do. That's the point of it....we generalize people as people, and not individuals. It was just my mood at the time i wrote it....
     
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