despair

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by chiefburningtoke, Sep 5, 2009.

  1. chiefburningtoke

    chiefburningtoke Member

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    I find it hard to be
    This cemetery
    Of ideas

    With brain
    of gelatinous storms
    and troops of aerosol mausoleums

    I already have the bodies
    Of those claiming to have lived here once
    My name stacks my specters
    On the spines ticking spike

    I don’t need these immigrants
    Entering the ports of ears and eyes
    Their letter footprints
    In the bogs of papyrus
    Manic paint swaths rioting
    With these prisoners
    Of awareness

    I want to cleave
    To that bald anchor of ghosts
    Our beastly intelligentsia
    Calls now;
    Beyond the callous mental womb
    Where hearts row with bones
    Toward any other
     
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  3. Vetty214

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    Very deep and thoughtful writing.

    The part below was the only part I stumbled on... something about "calls now" was not clear for me. I'm sure it was me not seeing something in this part to have it resonate better. Very enjoyable read. Thank you.

    I want to cleave
    To that bald anchor of ghosts
    Our beastly intelligentsia
    Calls now;
     
  4. chiefburningtoke

    chiefburningtoke Member

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    thanks for the review-probably should be "calls now" or "is calling now"
     

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