I Can't Be Perfect So Fuckoff, And Die

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Spyder, Jun 29, 2004.

  1. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    hardly poetry...
     
  2. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    well no one really, but i know that for a start poetry has structure and form. what you've just demonstrated above is a stream of thought practically...a rant, its not poetry, it has none of the hallmarks of what a poem is, so how can it be poetry? its just a peice of writting, not poetry.
     
  3. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    im not saying you should constrain yourself, but what you wrote above isnt poetry, its a peice of writting none the less.
     
  4. Willy_Wonka_27

    Willy_Wonka_27 Surrender to the Flow

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    not all poetry has a structure...i guess thiss would be ryming free form

    but it would be better clasified as lyrics i guess

    i think it shows your point well
     
  5. guardian_tnaos

    guardian_tnaos Member

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    hey spyder, fuck off and die. different people like different poetry. just bc you dont get it doesnt mean its not poetry.

    and dopesickkid, i loved the POETRY.
     
  6. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Spyder has the right to state their opinion just like you have the right to state yours.
    How about showing some respect for others different views instead of acting like a little kid?
    So stop being defensive and getting offended, that will get you nowhere.
    Posting on a public forum is not all peaches and cream, if you want honest reply, EXPECT to get a reply that you might not agree with or like very much, and learn to deal with it. If you don't like it, ignore it or take from it what you can. Yeesh...
     
  7. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    As for this being a poem or not....

    It is a poem, but typical for a 13 year old, good or bad, I'm not the one to say, hopefully 4 years from now you will progress more instead of writing things like "die bitch die" etc.
    But for now, it's alright, its your emotional outlet so use it, don't worry so much about whether its a great poem or not, it's all relative for now..
     
  8. guardian_tnaos

    guardian_tnaos Member

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    all words with meaning is poetry. what you (kittenx) wrote is poetry. and what spyder wrote was poetry. lectures in class, documentations, its all meant to inspire some kind of feeling or understanding. the question is not whether or not its poetry, but whether or not you can relate to it in a way that makes your emotions run high. dopesickkid described in words the feelings of almost every teenager. teenagers do not want to be understood, they do not want their parents or family to understand. they would rather be tragically misunderstood, and i think his poem portrayed that nicely.
     
  9. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Ya see poetry is subjective, it's personal. What evokes feelings in one, may not evoke feelings in another. Plus different people have different definitions. Some strictly believe that only rhyming poetry is true poetry. It's a somewhat confrontational ground to tread, so we have to be careful, and respect the differences and streer clear when inner passions soar...
     
  10. guardian_tnaos

    guardian_tnaos Member

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    agreed. what is poetry to one, may not be considered poetry to another. i respect those who respect others. notice that when you stated your opinion, i explained what i meant, without offending you. whereas, spyder simply stated that it was not poetry, therefore not worthy of another's views and opinions. i may have mistaken what she/he (sry, i didn't look at the profile) meant, but i think its wrong to just say that its not poetry, and not clearly state what is meant by their criticism.
     
  11. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Okay, yeah I see where you're coming from, but Spyder later did offer a somewhat redeeming followup.
    Anyway, lets not get too hung up on each others words, and I'll try to practice what I preach. :rolleyes:
     
  12. Cirrhosis

    Cirrhosis Banned

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    Both the poem and this thread made me laugh. Especially the comment "hey spyder, fuck off and die"

    Keep up the good work, kids!
     
  13. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    :rolleyes:

    Hmmm...Albuquerque such a funny name...
     
  14. JackDoff

    JackDoff Member

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    Who Cares if it's poetry or not? Probably here because it's most suited here than other places. I doubt anybody gived a shit where this thread belonged.
     
  15. Cirrhosis

    Cirrhosis Banned

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    gave*

    If you're posting in the poetry forum, it's nice to have a proper respect for the English language.
     
  16. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    thanks for the insults:p glad to see maturaty

    and when i read that poem, it didnt have the structure that it now has...so give me a break! jeeeezz
     
  17. roly

    roly Senior Member

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    everyones right, no ones wrong. as long as u have an opinion no one can say its right or wrong....they have no right. So, dopesickkid is right, spyder is right and i am right (although thats just my opinon, lol

    so what i am trying to say is peace.xxx

    but yeh u were all a bit harsh on poor spyder.

    rolyxxxxxxx
     
  18. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    In my opinion, this is poetry DopeSik. I mean, it may be personal and maybe everyone can't relate to it, but for Spyder or anyone else to say that it isn't poetry is just obserd because you even made a conscious effort to rhyme the lines. When I was your age I used to vent on paper a lot in the form of poetry just like you have demonstrated here. Keep on writing!!!! Don't let these negative comments get you down!
    Peace!
     
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