I speak from myself.

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I applaud your writing in traditional form. It's tough. Free verse has allowed so many hacks an entry but even it must follow standards and observe the basics of control. Keep at it. You can rhyme. Now start to pay attention to word choice. You'll get better and better.

 

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that first one reminded me

really great

 

I like the last line of the first stanza in 'Cabintop'.
"Time is not a number but rather bark peeling off trees."
Thanks 'see in blonde'.

 

Wow, great poem man, you have every right to be proud of it. It's one of those poems that I read and say to myself "Damn, I wish I'd written that!"

 

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