song\poem thing PLEASE READ!!!!

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by rydns, Jan 3, 2007.

  1. rydns

    rydns Member

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    I saw you laughing you looked at the ceiling
    pretending to be so non existant
    but you couldnt hide that smile or your eyes

    and I recall talking about an old freind named regret
    his name is so worn out and dusty just like the
    suit hes burried in.

    (chorus)
    just say goodbye to all the little things
    because there not as real as we thought
    and say hello to a trophy case of twisted memories
    because now thats all we got.

    and we'll try to work things we'll talk on the phone for
    hour or two just so that we can feel
    somewhat comfortable

    so we'll toast to the good time we'll toast to the bad
    we'll talk about all of the problems we had
    and try to find an optomistic response

    (chorus)
    just say goodbye to all the little things
    because there not as real as we thought
    and say hello to a trophy case of twisted memories
    because now thats all we got.

    so maybe just this time we'll take the long way
    and keep eachother company so neither of us
    fell alone.

    I saw you laughing you looked at the ceiling
    pretending to be so non existant
    but you couldnt hide that smile or your eyes

    :by rydns
     
  2. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    it had it's ups and it's downs

    the chorus was my favorite part
    the rest didn't interest me much
     
  3. rydns

    rydns Member

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    well at least you liked something about it... lol!!
     
  4. soundstepper323

    soundstepper323 Banned

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    not bad,
    I can hear a song to it.
     
  5. kwal30

    kwal30 Member

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    I'm not a very experienced writer but I'm a big fan of Jim Morrison and his poetry/lyrics and always aspired to be able to do write like that. My question is how many people write their poetry with the intention of it being a song and how many people write it just to be read as poetry. And for anyone who does both how does your approach differ between the two. By the way I thought the song on this page was well written but I guess it is hard for me to get the full impression without knowing the tune or kind of song your intention was.
     
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