Staring across you or Lingering on

Ok I want to preface this with the fact that I wrote it at 3 in the morning, It's about somebody I care for more then anything else and they don't get it despite the fact we are perfect.



Staring across you, stumbling
Days of optical confession
Vulgar fancy
Transgressed into new planes of knowledge
Write Manson poetry, exquisite melody
Risque' blue windowpanes covered in steam
Looking you over a view of uncertain desire
Lingering on
Cutting through my battered skin
A desperate sensation
Lingering on in vulgar fancy
Staring across you, stumbling
Solace in hues I did not know
Shaken I mouth common melody
Saved from darkened shades of onyx
Towards twilight I peer
Singing your songs of comfort
Looking you over a view of uncertain desire
Shaken I sing common melody
As you roam your generous harlot
Absent from memory
Trying to forget I stumble upon others
Overpowered by visions of you
Try and forget, move on and remember
Looking back
Lingering on in amorous fancy

In harrowing withdrawal I walk this path
Staring across you, stumbling
Shaken I scream common melody
Clawing for notice
As you roam your generous harlot
Lingering on...

 

hey, i really like that. very good.

 

Thank you!

 

I like it too. It sounds like it should be a song b/c of the places where you choose to repeat certain lines.

 

Thanks,I'd like to turn a lot of my work into song but I have a hard time putting it into a melody.