the return of the wanderer

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Jack Maundrell, Nov 8, 2007.

  1. Jack Maundrell

    Jack Maundrell C.A.P

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    A blur of wind blows by thats not warm nor cold
    but strong enough to graze your soul.
    And memories that shall keep the test of time
    for people unwilling to change their mind.
    To a world turning at will and yet I'm standing still
    observing the truth that my life may fulfill.
    Destined for seclusion and all the while
    my journey I came to love & yet vile.
     
  2. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    the first four lines are my favorite, they are the strongest, i think...
     
  3. Jack Maundrell

    Jack Maundrell C.A.P

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    I think so too
     
  4. poopzilla33

    poopzilla33 Member

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    in the first line try making it neither warm nor cold
     
  5. Jack Maundrell

    Jack Maundrell C.A.P

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    I was debating on 'nor' when I wrote it
     
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