Writing a good character, need some juicy spanish langauge

Discussion in 'Spanish' started by Martha84, Aug 7, 2007.

  1. Martha84

    Martha84 Member

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    I am writing a good juicy character for a short story. The story begins with a phone call a character, who is "the other woman", calling the wife. I know what she wants to say in english but would like sime suggestions for it to be in english. I have the dialogue I want to say in english below but would like some suggestions how to translate it. It doesn't have to be a literal translation, I just want it to have an impact on the reader. This is for a class assignment and is not to be published. Its only for a grade.

    The Other Woman: "Hello, so you are the one, huh?"...."Poor lady"...."Tell him I cant sleep with him tonight.....I beleive it's your turn tonight, honey."..."And tell him not to smoke marijuana tomorrow...I really hate that smell when we have sex.".....
    (she hangs up)

    TIA
     
  2. emelia

    emelia the resident gangsta

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    I'm not sure I totally got what you were asking...did you mean translate it into Spanish for you? If so, I tried my best:

    "Hola, eres la unica, ¿eh?"...."Estas desafortunado"...."Digale que no puedo tener sexo esta noche.... creo que es su turno hoy, mi amor"..."Y digale que no fumar marijuana mañana...odio la olor muchisimo cuando tenemos sexo."....

    Please bear in mind Spanish is my second language, so everything might not 100% grammatically correct :)
     
  3. CandyCotton

    CandyCotton Member

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    emelia, your translation has some errors, but its ok =)

    the correct would it be:

    "Hola, así que tu eres la única,¿eh?...Pobre mujer...Dile que no puedo dormir con él esta noche...creo que esta noche es tu turno, cariño...Y dile que no fume marihuana mañana...Odio mucho ese olor cuando tenemos sexo."
     
  4. Aurelio Mexican boy

    Aurelio Mexican boy Member

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    The Other Woman: "Hello, so you are the one, huh?"...."Poor lady"...."Tell him I cant sleep with him tonight.....I beleive it's your turn tonight, honey."..."And tell him not to smoke marijuana tomorrow...I really hate that smell when we have sex.".....
    (she hangs up)

    I think it'll be better like this.
    The other Woman. Así que eres tu...Pobre chica...Dile que no puedo estar con el esta noche...creo que esta noche te toca a ti cariño."...Además dile que no fume marihuana mañana...detesto ese olor cuando lo hacemos.
     
  5. kanana

    kanana Member

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    Esto esta mucho mejor, un espanyol mas mundano, coloquial, de calle!!!

    Kanana
     

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