I like this a lot. I can't quite put my finger on what it is that makes this seem so... real, but it's there and that's enough.
Man, i love it. The last line really hits it home.
Thank you both. I only wish this wasn't based on a real situation. :&
Blackout I've lost time. It's not about forgetting, the events haven't slipped my mind; there never was a grip on the grey matter for them to...
Wow, thats powerful, man.
thanks everyone :)
Ironic. You want blacks to be equal, but shun your well to do parents who are making it (quite well, it seems) in "white" society. I hope that...
Dead Still Hold your eyes dead still steady on the single star. Hold them still, until all your vision fades away; a world turned grey. Let your...
I agree with the second one, I'm the same way. I think, oddly enough, that holds true even when I'm writing positive stuff. Creative release and...
Wow. Now THAT is what poetry is supposed to be. I don't think I could heap enough praise on this one, nor does it need any; it's good enough on...
Great simplicity here, but powerful in the images it renders. If this isn't fictional, I wish you the best. Stay solid.
yeah, good one man. Just thinking of what history we've recorded in the last few thousand years, all the events and occurances, inventions, great...
Great poem man. The message? I see it as the cycles of life. Wake, rise, float, fall, sleep, wake, rise.... Ups and downs of life, it all comes...
such clarity in such brevity. nice job
Rainbow Blues I am being mocked. The rainbow recedes step for step as I strive to approach it, the beauty always just beyond my reach; and I...
I like it. Didn't know what you were talking about till near the end, but that's kind of a good thing, keeps you reading.
Nice one, hippiechick. This poem deserves the amount of feedback it's gotten :)
This is really good man, nice job.
It comes down to this question. Does TV cause violence, or do we demand TV violence because we are already violent? I fall on the latter side. I...
Too Late For Love A lone cricket sings from the bushes under the cold October moonlight. He came too late, his song goes answered by none....
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