This work does not have the same punching power as your very nice work called 'Dad'. I think this is lacking a hook. Peace.
I like the first poem becase I think it was well thought out and it flowed well. Nice job.
ahhhh, the tearing apart of american faimly has been in full force for awhile now. You can thank the establishment for that and ther programmnig....
0.999/10
Back in Michigan... No more worse for the Florida wear; sore of course sorta from it's boredom glares. As if... Some sunny flair shot me...
How much time did yo put in to this, honestly now. I like. I can totally picture this song in my head.
Dear Death, the ones who bitch about this place sucking are the ones who are pompous, in such away that living in the past clouds the current...
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you gotta keep trying so eventually you get it right =)
lol I see. that's cool you translated that. You must of wanted us to enjoy it. Thanks.
This is so poorly written that it has a childish charm to it. This piece reads like English is not your first language at all. Coming form a 42...
Excuse me? "Back off from US and OUR poetry?"Last time I checked I was a part of this community. I have contributed more critiques and out put...
inbloom I'm sorry if you feel that my responses and reactions to others work is not full of honesty and integrity. How to you measure my level of...
In response to everybody: Let me read and critique in peace. I don't impede on your right to do so. I have the right as you all do to comment.
I'll be more constructive next go at it. Thanks for pointing that out. I think I need to be. I don't think I have any standards really (if you...
If I see a work that has some positive features then ill have some positive things to say. I will not, however, lie and blow smoke. I will...
I feel like I need a speech impediment to read through this work. I feel it forces me to talk really slow and in flat monotone (think Spock from...
This is one of your most armature works, not to say your previous pieces were anything to marvel at. You dirty opinion whore. Love n light
What happened that resulted in this work? You left out the reason this combination of words came about and thus my interest was not anything to...
This opening is great. I felt you drop the flow after this...to me, it sort of lost the smoothness. You should use this opening again and write...
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