well i dont have much criticism for ya cuz i liked it. i found your eyes, even if they were troubled, very personable. dialogue was great...added...
my unpoetry begins with a late afteroon sigh and a sly body curl that brings our bodies together. such a gorgeous fit. like my favorite pair of...
olivia dont cry, you know he loves you truly even though he never lets you in he'll never tell you honey, but you know its there in the way he...
i agree...thats wonderful for 14. i thought i had a handle on it until the last few lines, and it seemed to change somehow or veer onto a...
i once was messing around with a guy that turned out to be such a bad kisser that, even under the influuence of much indonesian alcohol, i could...
lovely point, bhaskar, as usual.
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i kinda like the unassuming stance it takes. it could be said with the flat tone of one who is completely disillusioned or unimpressed with the...
its a bit scattered and so i am having trouble pulling out one clear theme. but i like the first four lines very much.
oh this i like. the way you set it up is fantastic, and the ambiguity of it all only adds to its mystery...and yet the emotion in it is...
this is very intriguing. you have a way with lines. i especially like the lines "i could be your alter-girl if you promise not to preach"...
i like the way it flows and the message the whole enchilada, if you will. very nice. :)
yeah with my ex, "wanna watch a movie" was code for sex. weeeeiiiird. :H
my computer screen lights up; a familiar, if slightly hysterical flow of confusion pulses from your end to mine oh, my cousin! you are still...
p.s. tom, i am so fascinated by your signature
broom tops?! good god, no, unlessyou want splinters in a place splinters shoud never, ever be and seriously, whats so bad about buying a cheap,...
ive heard of this stuff called Tenskin (or somethin like that) that you can buy in most beauty supply shops. its was highly recommended by the...
mysti, this poem is probably the best poem, structurally speaking and in the way that it flows, that ive read of yours. good job :)
i love it. fulmah's observation of "volumes between the lines" hit the nail right on the head.
i must admit im having a hard time getting a handle on a meaning. care to impart your own personal meaning?
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