i dont believe anyone can write the best, and you will never have the perfect piece. read them for yourself and maggie moo's is better
wow thats quite intrusive also sounds personal
i see. =] lovely. i guess when u said biased i thought it was a bad thing.
=D thanks both of u! but i dont see how it is psychological =\ explain?
i like this untitled one, the last line is a tricky but powerful the description of feeling for the wall, will my eyes adjust, etc. makes me feel...
Arms wrapped between your dainty hands And that indifferent over-the-shoulder glance A photograph of your dripping face Blanketed across each...
=] thanks kitten! im hoping to hear more from you soon
i love that line
Daylight sinking into the ocean Shading away into oblivion Pass swimming silhouettes i love this line, it really caught me into a visual
=] thanks sky. ive been trying and ive grown so much as a writer since i first started posting on this forum thanks to a lot of people, and your...
I am a thief, a bandit, a swindler Under no circumstance will I forget Tragic toned and misty-eyed He whispers his bravado to a complete stranger...
is that one about God? or what we percieve as God? 7 i like it
i just cant really relate to the quotes it sounds like something u actually said to some1 idk its a matter of opinion
i also love this is how it happens, true story -anyone can relate, very human. the sketch 1 is a little too personal for me, but the last 5 lines...
weird lol nice though
you use 'unexpected' so much, it becomes expected. lol
thanks red, i think open water is a matter of taste, im not sure about the ending. i think ill change it real quick. btw guys i dont edit my...
aw. nice i like the drowning wick, and empty sheets
I am rebuilding your shattered shelter with rusted tools Aided by a hammer’s teeth Tugging corroded nails from my temple Crafting a stool To...
thanks a bunch skyfire, i see what you mean. i forced that line, honestly. and i changed it because you are right.
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