I just added the last stanza, so hopefully it has improved somewhat!
I wrote this recently, but I still think it sounds unfinished, suggestions to improve it would be appreciated. Recipients It seems some gifts...
Very interesting, the rhythm of the piece is very much an example of its message, with each line seeming to attach to the next one. Well done!
If you've been watching the news, it should be pretty obvious what inspired this. As always, critiques are welcome! On War Why do we bleed?...
Man bellows greatness, his words melt into space. Man builds monuments, the earth seems to shrug. Man spills...
Awesome piece, I love the seamless blend of the theme of dreams and the ocean. Keep up the good work!
I'll be on my way to USF. That's right, I was accepted to the University of South Florida. Soon as get my hands on a laptop once I'm settled in,...
I wrote this a few months ago, but wasn't sure whether I actualy liked it. This is based on an true story, where my dad found abandoned kittens...
Thank you for your kind words! I was feeling very tense yesterday and I knew if did not write something soon, I was going to scream.
Silence Silence folds upon itself layer after layer, filling first the mind, cleansing it of every errant thought, smiling at the...
Here's another poem I'm sort of unsure about, once again critiques are welcome. In defense of God, what can I say? “All who doubt will...
I wrote this yesterday, but I'm still on the fence as to whether or not I like it, so please critique it as much as you like! NOTE: The shema...
An intersting piece so far, but perhaps it is best left that way. You said its a work in progress, but I think that the poem in its current form...
Thanx, I know it was stpid to bump my thread, but I don't post pics that often.
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I uploaded these from my brothers digital camera. They're a few months old and the goatee I had is long since gone. If they're too large, I'll...
Ante Meridian I never thought my gears could turn so long. They churned through what felt like a surreal journey. We were refugees, fleeing...
Wow, it was as if a beautiful painting was being described! Well done!
The title of the poem basicaly says it all... enjoy! Boredom If I stare hard enough, I can make little dots appear on the wall. Little...
Thank you, and might I add that I love the picture in your signature, it looks so peaceful!:)
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