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When people ask me why Im so tan, I say "I just got back from Jamaica ya mon"..

 

This hot pocket gave me major heart burn

 

should have put it in a montel williams power juicer and drank your hot pocket.

 

just went for a stoned bike ride along the water... it's so nice out right now

 

I have to write a story for English, so i was planning on filling it with messages as to how society is so messed up. About a guy having this completely messed up dream of himself walking through the city seeing all these things such as, anorexic models on billboards, morbidly obese people on the streets sitting next to underweight poverty stricken children, corruption, money, greed, the so called food we ingest, etc... I just don't know how to start it yet, i was thinking of making the character wake up (waking up within the dream) to the sounds of sirens (or some other awful sound displaying the issues in our society) as he gets dressed and goes outside, then at the end of the story making him wake up from this "dream" just to realize it's pretty much reality. But i can't help but start the story with "The man arose out of bed as....." but "the man" just sounds so stupid, any suggestions?

Also, what else could i add that is clearly messed up with society? So far my first thoughts were money, celeberties, poisonous foods such as McDonalds, corruption such as politics and government, police brutality, hate, greed, exploitation, the rich get richer the poor get poorer, the media... anything else?

 

why dont you write just that..

 

Maybe you could write the story from a first person perspective? Do it in a stream of consciousness style during which you can describe all the fucked up emotions that the main character feels as he observes societal defects from the first person perspective.

Only other suggestion I have is war.. but that sort of plays into politics and government, doesn't it.

 

I dunno, i just thought that starting a story with "The man" sounded kinda lame

 

That's a good idea! I really like that, never thought of making it first person. I don't think i've ever written a story in first person before...

 

My Suggestion Is...."A Man Wakes Up"....



Cheers Glen.

 

I think i'm going to go with something like "As I awoke to the sirens screaming below....etc"

 

Instead of starting it off with 'the man' just start by describing the sirens and them lead into how the lucid dreamer is dreaming a crazy fucked up world where the FDA approves shit like ability but outlaws stuff like MMJ n MDMA

 

Inconvenient Truth..

 

three writes don't make a right

 

Sorry couldn't help my self but , three whites don't make a Wong

 

Nice I like that, too bad it's the world we live in !!!

 

just drank a few brews after a weird/fun day ar work now about to smoke some bud and ride my long board

 

feeling extra good this morning... bought a few scratch tickets, maybe I'll get lucky.

I'm going to go home tonight and start Turkish lessons on Rosetta stone. I work with a bunch of Turkish guys so I figure if I want to learn another language it's my best bet.

 

turkish guys can get turkish hashish.no?

ortus...just launch into the story and have the dude wake up at the end....

start with a description of the scene as opposed to a description of the dude or his actions...

''the light turned green just as the...''

or

''the early morning sun had not yet warmed the streets as the blah blah blah''

 

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