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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by rambleON, Apr 3, 2009.

  1. Dejavu

    Dejavu Until the great unbanning

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    ^ I like : D
     
  2. Manservant Hecubus

    Manservant Hecubus Master of Funk and Evil

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    from a poem I heard today about Eden

    "The apple seemed like it should be a pair."
     
  3. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Speak to me on a level never felt. Past or present...

    Standing tall, in defiance of your collar bone. Hallow be thy- oh you! So prized, by alliance again with science. Cold. Showering signs, lined with sticks stacked in stones. So true, like a fish in, out of water asking why fins get so stoned ?

    I don't know.

    Like fresh salt licks sold in Seas. To Scholars who somersault brooks, reeling in only cheddar cheese. Acid reflex follows. Brought up by sequence, as only in secret we agree to disagree. Too heavy, and when the feather flys free, simply be. Against me is the scenic way. Believe it. Oh so miserable me. Take the next exit, now so sinister seen.

    Seek me out. On a plain never drafted. Now or later.

    See if we climb together, only to be asked why ? My answer ? Foul ply in a sea saw. Holy on the other side, reeds and all. That's because we open doors that at a distance, freely fall.

    For us, of us. By us. FUBU not. Fear us, because we clot blood.
    Shot out, to fish Brook Trout and blot out flower buds.

    Give me reason. And I will. Give me you and it's done.

    On an ice burg tip, cooked short of common sense.
    A shore once was, for us. Of us, on this ocean trip.


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    6194
     
  4. Dejavu

    Dejavu Until the great unbanning

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    I was nearly killed last night.
     
  5. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    I was just thinking of using "collar bone" in a piece of my own. But this is hot, it's a trip and although I don't know what it means to you, I don't think I want to or need to because I enjoyed the feeling it gave me and the atmosphere. It's one of those pieces where I might have questions about certain lines or wording, but I don't mind them because they only add to the mystery and the texture of the poem.
    I also have to compliment the breaks and the pauses, those are subtle things but they really add a lot.
     
  6. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    I <3 you kittenx



    You just made my day. it was an exciting feeling when I saw you posted here. I was just thinking to write a new one just a minute before. You've been a strong influence in the newer stuff I've been doing I noticed since reading you.

    Your compliment lifted my dark mood I was going to write in though lol

    Thank you.
     
  7. Dejavu

    Dejavu Until the great unbanning

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    So write in the bright! I'd read you, loud and clear. ;D
     
  8. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Don't you know ?

    I'm that Swisher Sweet blunt, wrapped.
    Six foot deep, out back rollin' spinal taps
    One eye dank; My other eye sportin' pirate patch
    Hour glass strokin' late, eatin' crazy scobby snacks

    ...Drum line pulsatin' out old harmonic flow
    Rewind ? Beats bass booms like ole dominos
    Boy's all fading soon, zero pharmaceuticals
    Doe in season, Bambi's dope ?... Dear: magical,
    Oxygen is now premium, laughin' over chemicals
    Seeing is believing, I see dreams being physical
    On it again, down periscope chasing rabbit holes
    Wow, Alice is my miracle...lickin' em' pink popsicles
    If she axe nicley, I'll give her ice scream reciprocal

    Dawg,

    This trip, be up on my bacon pan somethin' electrical
    I'm wired like ten jackals pacin' past the paradoxical
    Again, I'm that swisher blunt, done crashed all obstacles

    Please...fix me.

    [​IMG]
     
  9. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Wouldn't that be funny...

    If you ate hamburgers and daffodils
    In Indo China laughing at cinema films
    If you played Nintendo with an Australian
    Sinned so hard on Pentecost with Ethiopians
    If you told lies as jokes with fifteen one liners
    Laughed it off and pulled it over Mr. Oppenheimer
    Who's that ? I don't fucking know, a bad ass
    It's all because funny people are the saddest

    Wouldn't that be funny...

    If you lost your home in economic crashes
    Held it in, n' in your mind is all chronic madness
    If you lost your child to the sate social workers
    Still keep her room exactly but never fight for her
    And in your mind are shades of all the eternal shine
    But you're blinded by tears, showing that hurtful side
    You go to the show by yourself and order two drinks
    It's your birthday, but in your mind it's been two weeks
    You think of ways life should have been, could of been
    You are reminded of reality, here we go again, go again

    Wouldn't it be nice...

    If you stood up and said, "MAN THAT'S FUCKING IT"
    Cut all ties to forfeit everything now, as soon as it sets
    As good as it gets, you remove all your systemic regrets
    Wouldn't that be funny, if you left and hit the road
    Nobody noticed you gone (only cold and icicles know)
    And you walk with a back pack on, canned food dinners
    Three states away and still life is never gettin' better
    A cigarette in your ear and a match stick in your teeth
    Smoking so many dreams with that static on you feet

    You start to miss your Nintendo and your impromptu jokes
    Your daughter's up in the ward, you want to give up hope
    You wonder if Australia accepts outlaws, stoked to start over
    The ocean whispers a boat and your sail drifts apart, a loner

    You give it all up, even the road and her adventure
    No direction home, you feel a the bite like dentures
    Not authentic anymore, no zest, or function to live
    You think of Indo China and Ethiopia and their kids
    Out of food now and your gut sticks to your spine (stole that line)
    With your face in dirt you give up, sick, out of time
    Wouldn't that be funny if you didn't live in the wild
    You could die and never have to forsake your child

    You look up to the apex of your situation now
    Up in some astral nirvana, death executes on clouds
    Watchin' them part, you see your daughter... it can't be
    She is smiling, looking at you, and you are so fucking happy

    You scream seven times with squeaky vocals,

    "I love you baby, I'll see you soon...I miss you so much"

    That would be funny, if this wasn't really happening
     
  10. skyfire

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    "Neo" was fun, nice trip, but I liked "Wouldnt That Be Funny" the best, it is so strong. The editor in me wants to tighten it up and punctuate, but its very good. :)
     
  11. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    Rebirth

    I'm


    Haunted by the memories of places I've been
    Of my faceless past sins, palpitations' & spins
    Running up endless stairs. Up lifes' downward slopes
    Knowin' the old, preparing up there Mountains of Hope
    But I'm twisted in cobwebs, trapped in insidious plots
    Just a spider asleep, life is feedin' me insects and rot
    Crawling to the surface like fat worms after hard rains
    My memory is power, like if a dream could star gaze
    My dreams go uninterpreted, like a letter never read
    It's the better end--I'm bitter for being altogether dead
    Fuck choices I made, pleasures are some how sufferings
    Just allow my voice to now measure
    out these mutterings:

    *

    I'm still thirteen years old, joining a cult to find love
    I'm the awkward bookish boy, adults' lies like butt plugs
    Their acid acceptance is my emotional oxy clean shine
    Promise of fair weather but passive storms never reside

    I'm still seven, and a Venus Flytrap tryin' to be mysterious
    As my parents joke at the end of a marriage, why so serious ?
    I'm still seventeen, walking in my first bid of doomed freedom
    Somehow, even now I can't believe I just got rid of REASON

    I still live in my car, years after founding a new family
    Renting more permanent hurt. Astounding is my agony!
    All the police, and criminals, and false friends linger & chill
    Most are in my head; they're all sleepin' on box springs still
    It's still my wedding day, the day of the birth of my child
    The day we got the autism diagnosis, downward little smiles

    It's the day my wife left me, and the day I left my wife
    It's today, my child and wife in the oceans called life
    Me on the shore, scribbling this essay in front of dolphins
    It's all those times, together with thirty nails in my coffin

    When you make truly significant life choices, remember this
    Before you age, or commit a crime, use drugs, flash your tits
    Or get married, or choose to be homeless: all splendor is shit
    Some of these choices are crossroads, a direction you choose
    Dreams can and will change you forever, a suggestion I use:

    Treat your mind as a museum you must curate
    In time a REBIRTH must come, it's not life but fate

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  12. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    those last two lines are great and I love the picture! very nice
     
  13. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    thank you skyfire. I got my eye on your thread.
     
  14. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    Well don't be shy..u can tell me what u think..I can take it ;)
     
  15. rambleON

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    [​IMG]

    My Life

    Match stick memories
    Hot dog sulfur-wick in assemblies
    Cincinnati dollars hit, suffer shit generally
    Burn sixty chincy patties, mixed in gentile seats
    Smell swine ? Why isn't that Porky Pig's melody ?
    Well, it's limes in lies, poorly fixed monopoly
    I count it all in honesty, put forty six on sloppily

    It's like

    Funnel cake boss with Johnny apple sauce
    Running late costs money with tad pole frogs
    Staple my chin to the carpet and vacuum
    A dental floss victim, in apartments to make room
    What is it that I'm saying ?...double click my life
    Down load my processor and glitch about its price

    You see, I'm that hard brick butter slice
    YAH my Father, he cut me naught like knives
    I defeat my enemies, til ALL His Kingdom come
    I beat em' endlessly. He IS RAW FREEDOM, son

    HALLELUYAH
     
  16. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    The large banner above read:
    "Stand Up To Hunger"
    or some shit like that
    stitched with corporate logos
    reminding you continually
    of who puts on for 'your' city
    CNN, Twitter, Visa, Kraft
    and on and on, the usual...
    it hung in view of thousands
    of young-20-somethings mostly
    whom all were a proposed solution
    the "now or never generation", "the future"
    Stand Up To Hunger
    the buzz word or whatever

    Below, on the stage
    a familiar speech popped off,
    a Maybe-It's-Maybelline girl
    speaking on behalf of greater interests
    something about taking an implant
    to fix hunger, or some shit like that
    something like it's painless
    the future of tomorrow, today
    or whatever it was
    I could hardly hear or see her though
    the electrified spasm of humanity
    all in front of me, behind, to the left
    to the right, on top, on the bottom
    all over the place
    BUZZED...

    Smart phones, tablets and tech.
    positioning for their facebook picture
    a chance to be judged worthy
    or whatever the fuck
    in sight of their consummate queen
    to demonstrate high value
    or some shit like that

    Meanwhile, the speech grew
    the show ramped up
    celebrities appeared
    Lady Gaga with strange
    triangles above her head
    Bill and Linda Gates with
    bizarre hand gestures
    malnourished Asians came too
    skinny pawns next to the fat queen
    like advertisements
    like space monkeys
    like que-cards

    Hunger was the problem
    like a boogeyman in the desert
    spectacle was the reaction
    like the hit on the twin towers
    it was all there...hanging
    Boeing, CBS, Exxon, T-mobile
    on and on...on that banner
    "Stand Up To Hunger"
    the implant was the solution
    like all the people cried for
    saying, "lest we too starve"

    The speech was delivered, hard
    the final solution sold in dazzles
    establishing the crowd as a trend
    going viral for the cure, view counts
    the new standard in world community
    chipped, relevant and all flabbergasted
    the majority was in obscurity
    and the devil was in the details

    Still, yet

    Above them stretched out, unabated
    over the sea of expendability
    over the flock of free-range chickens
    Hanging with certainty, with all assiduity
    that large banner with its colossal resources
    on that day...
    did not give one fuck
     
  17. rambleON

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    I'm a pundit of orchestral table scraps
    the arbitrary tremors of afterthought
    in the second balcony, forty-second row
    nose bleeding, I occupy
    comfortably
    a proud oak chair.

    Blacklisted above
    muffled violin palpitations and
    insipid pulls of rhythmic murmur
    I begin to fold my concert program
    seven times.

    The Woodwinds dispatch a hum-drum
    of empty spectacle
    dog fighting
    the hollow sorties of paper airplanes
    raining down from the second balcony,
    forty-second row.
    Launched with the technology
    of my velcro shoe.

    The Strings respond
    one octave lower, pitched
    in stealth formation. Forcing a drop zone
    to dissident sound gardens of
    predatory hummingbirds
     
  18. rambleON

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    Porcelain boy SOLDIER

    If I never talked
    I wouldn't listen more
    Cos I'm that fresh, frozen dialog
    Of conversations unspoken
    Between contention and sulfur heat

    If I never listened
    I wouldn't listen, or be thirsty
    Because I'm a rooster quit cold turkey
    Deploy this tactic, can't you see some static ?
    Constituting emergencies on my path with
    Dynamic planning, with fast bandwidth

    I'd rotor wisdom on empire
    Broadcasting reversals over tight rope
    So, the less noise I make
    The more I communicate this:
    Body language like ghost shell
    Illumines my snake pit,
    pent up mostly, by screaming wholesale

    What is it, but is what is
    Sometimes when, on what consequences


    Don't you get it fool ?

    I'm that Porcelain boy soldier, little atlas chin
    Who Chariots a land rover, over his requiem
    Riding cursed Frankenstein monster
    First to herd Cyclops in past bad posture
    Though, you will fail to understand this,

    Because of Fair Trade Poppy
    Awful habit. Contrived little carcinogens
    Dry Skittles eaten alive by his Rabbit Friend
    Easter eggs: painted by China synthetics
    Incubated puzzles cracked concave genetics

    What ?
     
  19. rambleON

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    I got this brittle shell
    It’s ready to expose core
    baring my secret scar
    even now as it cracks
    I sip the inside yolk.
    To protect my hurt
    all I can do is nurture
    a nature and my creature
    I offer no condolence
    I clean up the cover up
    looking for the way out
    seeing just an exit wound
    outside under 14.2 Psi
    boiling cess pools abound
    I think I’ll drip in open bath
    become aware of depth
    with little to drown in
    my life is on the line
    this is paradise of paradox.
    A life saving memories
    spent at an absolute end
    as the shade strikes deep
    sinks familiar sun in me, never again
    clarity is death, feeling very confused
    I’ve wanted both. Was sure I didn’t
    such a sterile horizon, that’s me in a jar
    insightful I digress. Confess, reflex.
    still my chin lifts so high
    my mind rewinds mix tape
    Stop. Pause. Play.
    In this pineapple express
     
  20. apricot~sky

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    :guitarist:

    not as good as my pies thou...:)
     

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